Narrative+Writing

14/6/11 WALT: use our senses to help describe in our writing

S.C. We can describe what our marshmallow looks like smells like fells like tastes like

Description of a marshmallow


 * My marshmallow looks like a big puffy pig on a boiling hot day.**


 * My marshmallow smells like fresh strawberry toothpaste.**


 * My marshmallow feels like a hard volcano rock that had erupted a thousand years ago**


 * My marshmallow tastes like candyfloss from heaven with a mountain load of icing sugar on the summit of my marshmallow**

8/6/11 WALT: Identify similes and metaphors

//Metaphors// are a way to compare to by saying that one thing is another thing. For example, we say somebody is a //fool//. In the past in Europe, a fool was a person who entertained the king or queen by doing silly things. The fool was a kind of clown. He often did crazy or stupid things to make people laugh. So when we call somebody a fool we really mean that he or she is doing something silly or stupid. We don’t really mean that they are somebody who entertains the king or queen. We are using a metaphor. What do we mean when we say these things: When we //say someone is a pig// we really mean that **They there food√** When we //call someone an angel// we really mean that **They are nice√** If we //say someone is a giant// we really mean that **They are tall√** When //we call a man an ogre or a woman a witch// we really mean **They're ugly√** When somebody plays cards and //we call them a shark//, we really mean that **They are really good at cards√** If we say that //somebody is a volcano ready to explode//, we really mean that **They are angry√** When we say somebody is //bright// we mean that **They are smart√**

8/6/11 WALT: Identify similes and metaphors

Metaphors are imaginative ways to describe something by comparing that thing to something else. For example, if I wanted to say that Dan is tall, I could say that //Dan is a giant//. Use a metaphor to describe somebody who is:

tall **Shelby is a tall giraffe**

kind **Hamish is kind biscuit**

fast **Korban is a fast cheetah**

slow **Quinn is slower than a turtle**

smart **Reuben is smarter than Elbert einstein**

fat **I am fatter than an elephant**

sneaky **Reuben is sneaky as a mouse**

angry **Cameron is angry as a bull**

beautiful **I am a beautiful Lamborghini**

ugly **Reuben is uglier than ugly betty**

stubborn **My mum is stubborn**

short **Dave is shorter than a ant**

thin **Connor is a thin twig**

silly **Nathaniel is sillier than a silly person**

scared easily **Alex is scared easily**

8/6/11 WALT: Identify similes and metaphors

Similes are a way to compare two things using ‘like’ or ‘as’. For example, if I want to say that somebody //swims well//, I can say they //swim like a fish// because fish swim well. There are two basic patterns that you can use. verb + like + noun She swims like a fish.

He looks like an ogre. **Sam K is as ugly as an ogre**

She plays like a pro. **Taylor plays soccer like Lionel Messi**

He walks like a duck. **Korban walks like a duck**

She acts like a fool. **Shelby acts like a fool**

as + adjective + as + noun

He is as tall as a giant. **Dave is as tall as a giant**

She is as fast as a rocket. **Taylah is as fast as a rocket**

He is as graceful as a swan. **Dallas as as graceful as a swan**

She is as sneaky as a fox. **Abbey H is as sneaky as a fox**

He is as quiet as a mouse. **Kurtis is as quiet as a mouse**


 * 20/6/11**

being personified and explain which human trait or action is applied to the object or idea. 1. The wind whispered through the dark and gloomy forest. 2. The gardener lovingly added the manure to his crops believing he was making happy flowers. 3. As we walked through the scorching desert, the sun beat down on us. 4. Time crawled as Tim sat in the hot detention room painfully watching the clock tic. 5. The lumberjack leveled the many trees into a clearing and his chainsaw sang its deadly song.
 * Directions:** In each sentence, an object or idea is personified. Identify the object or idea that is
 * Personification Worksheet**
 * Personification:** a figurative language technique where an object or idea is given human traits or characteristics.


 * 1. The wind whispered through the dark and gloomy forest.**

What is being personified? **The Wind** Which human trait or quality is given? **Whispered**


 * 2. The gardener lovingly added the manure to his crops believing he was making happy flowers**

What is being personified? **Flowers** Which human trait or quality is given? **Happy**


 * 3. As we walked through the scorching desert, the sun beat down on us.**

What is being personified? **Desert** Which human trait or quality is given? **Walked**


 * 4. Time crawled as Tim sat in the hot detention room painfully watching the clock tic.**

What is being personified? **Detention Room** Which human trait or quality is given? **Crawled**


 * 5. The lumberjack leveled the many trees into a clearing and his chainsaw sang its deadly song.**

What is being personified? **Chainsaw** Which human trait or quality is given? **Sang**


 * 7. When the patriots defeated the redcoat army, freedom rang across the fruited plains.**

What is being personified? **Freedom** Which human trait or quality is given? **Rang**


 * 8. As Alice searched for her missing pencil, she said sarcastically, “Well, I guess it just walked off of my desk.” She looked at her classmates accusingly.**

What is being personified? **Pencil** Which human trait or quality is given? **Walking**
 * 9.****Kelly was so happy that Tom and she were moving in together, but when she walked into her new residence, she dropped her suitcase. She had never seen the inside of the house which Tom’s grandmother had given them, and though she was grateful to receive such a nice gift, the ugly yellow wallpaper in the kitchen screamed at her. She knew she would have a lot of work to do to make her new house livable.**

What is being personified? **The house** Which human trait or quality is given? **Screamed**


 * 10. William knew that he shouldn’t have eaten the last cookie out of the cookie jar. He knew that his father loved to eat chocolate chip cookies after work, but William ate the last one anyway. Now as he waited for his father to come home, guilt poked and chewed at William. As delicious as the cookie was, William now wished that he had never opened that cookie jar.**

What is being personified? **The cookie** Which human trait or quality is given? **Ate**

21/6/11











__Tuesday 21st June 2011__

__Walt: Use dialogue correctly to enhance our writing.__

“Hey Lila look theres Wilson”


 * “Oh ye lets go and see him”**

“ wonder if he remembers us”


 * “Lets find out”**

“Hey he remembers us”


 * “Lets see if he knows where Mum and Dad are”**

I doubt it Lila


 * “Hey look he’s starting to run away from us lets see where he goes”**